This was actually the first MPI story that I had trouble watching. there was really something "off" about the episode that failed to draw me in and I actually stopped it to go to to sleep, which has never happened before
I also had to keep rewinding it as I wasn't getting some of the minor plot points. I think they were going for a "big time" feel with it but they just didn't pull it off for a number of reasons. I think mostly it failed in feeling too "forced"; maybe because the writers were operating outside of their comfort zone. Problems I had in no order:
Editing flubs - there were a few, but the most notable was after the shootout at the safe house, it cuts in the middle of the action cutting of a guy jumping in mid air and the music. the comedy / gun fight overlap was in poor taste. the routine about zombie hookers and the guys trying to kill the kids..maybe they were trying to be hip there..
TM pausing when comedienne look alike walks by during "lovers quarrel" - strange. We know her murder is something that would bother TM, but it's not substantiated in the episode. It didn't seem to bother him when it happened or during the investigation.
Dental Lawyer turns entertainment lawyer - I dont get it.
There were specific lines I had trouble with as well, like they were artificially injected into the script to add drama, but IMHO failed:
"I know I usually miss all your birthdays" - when the lawyer hands him the present. They didn't know each other when TM served her the litigation. It was such an obvious continuity error it ruined my suspension of disbelief.
"I had no where else to go" - TM shows up at the lawyers house after the gunfight at the safe house. Did I miss something? was the lawyer supposed to be an old girlfriend? He was there, more or less on Robin's behalf, and yet he had no money for expenses? No rental car, no hotel room? It was obviously wedged into the script to provide a romantic backdrop, but I don't think it worked.
"You're in too deep, you're coming with me" - TM is usually very direct about his clients safety, even though they do manage to tag along or show up unannounced. I think the line was to make him look more like a tough guy to fit the "bigness" of the episode, but it really doesn't work for the TM we've all come to know and love.